Palke hai tumhari ya fir ankhe jo kahar dhaati hai,
Jhapkati ho tum par saanse meri ruk jati hai.
Maathe ko tumhari ye jo bindia sajaati hai,
Naa jaane kitni raato ki neend aur din ke chain churati hai.
Hotho ki laali hai ya gulaab odhe hua hai,
Is muskaan par tumhari kitno ka dil atka hua hai.
Gaal hai tumhare ya rui ka koi baadal hai,
Pyase ki pyaas mita de, ye roop tumhara wo sawan hai.
English:-
Is it your eyes or those eyelids that wreaks havoc,
Albeit you flutter them, it stops my breath.
The bindi decorates your forehead like a lilac,
Leaving me insomniac as whirlpools brew.
Is it the redness of your lips or have you veiled a rose,
A smile on your face and the hitherto beating hearts froze.
Is it your glowing cheeks or a white cloud of cotton,
Quenching the thirst, your guise is that monsoon.
That Hindi version π damn I love your writing.
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Thank you so much! I couldn’t bring it out in english though ππ but since I wrote it in hindi, I didn’t expect to bring the same effect! Thank you for your appreciation ππ€
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The English version was good as well, I enjoyed it!
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Thank you yar! It means a lot πππ€
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Loved it, dually so. The translation was as good as the original version. Some great lines, Parth and the choice of words is pretty awesome. Taaliya β€ π
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ππβ€οΈβ€οΈ thank you so much!π I am flattered!!πππ
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You’re most welcome re. I enjoyed it thoroughly
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Yayyy!!π€π€π€π€
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OMG..! This was so romantic. Beautiful words. β€
Saawan was never so amazing boy <3. Superb work. Both versions are gorgeous. Your description took away my heart. This is magic. π
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Aww!!β€οΈ Thank you so much yaar!πππ
I am so happy!! Yayy!!πππ
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pleasure always β€ keep smiling and be happy
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Both equally beautifull…i agree with all my Sundar behnas who commented
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Thank you so much!π€ππ
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So mesmerising writing! Both in Hindi and English!
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Thank you so much for your appreciation!π€πβ€οΈ
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This is a beautiful combo of some traditional and contemporary writing! I love your workππ
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Hey thank you so much!ππ I agree! It tends to highlight the beauty of an Indian woman ππ
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And you do it very elegantly ππ! Given my Tamil upbringing, I couldn’t fully understand the Hindi version but I am sure, it must be as beautiful as the English oneπ
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Oh thank you so much!!π€π€
I have been in Chennai for around 27 months! π¬π¬ I appreciate you trying to read the hindi version!!ππ€ Nandri!!π€π€π
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Hahahahah π You’re so nice
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Aww! Thank you so much! Your compliments gave me a confidence that I have done well ππ and that my chennai friends will like it as well!!π¬π€ Tons of Nandri π€
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I ain’t a tamilian, just my upbringing is of that beautiful stateπ
And, your chennai friends are going to like it for sureπ be ready with “mikka nandri”π
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Hahaha!!ππ Thank you.. I will be ready π¬π¬ you are so sweet!π€
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Wonderfully penned ββ
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Thankyou so much ππ
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Lovely Comparison β₯β₯
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Thank you so much π€
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Very beautiful, Parth! β€β€
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Ji shukriya.. shukriya!!!
Apke liye English me likhna hojata hai hme ;)ππ
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Hehe so sweet! I’m grateful! πβ€
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Hehe ππ
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Masallahh
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Shukriya!π
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I don’t know the hindi of your welcomeπ
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Hahaha!! No worries! Thank you for your lovely comment and for reading my work!ππ€
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What is the hindi of Welcome?π
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Swaagat!π¬
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Ahhh, swag se karenge sabka swagatππ
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You have many fans for your intoxicating words! Add me to the list β€
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Awwww!!ππβ€οΈβ€οΈβ€οΈ I am elated!!ππ You made my dayπ€
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Wowww
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Thank you π
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What a shayar!!!!ππππππ
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Thank you π
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really loved it bro!!! you should try these on open mics maybe
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Thank you so much!π Open micsππ not happening π€£π but thanks again, I will surely think about it π
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Hindi version was awesome
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Thank you so much. I am glad you liked it. π€
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poetry at it’s best!
add even me to your fans’ list!! π
loved it! β€
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Awwww!!β€οΈ Thank you re!ππ
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If I were a guy, I’d definitely dedicate this to my significant other! Dayum!
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ππππππ hehehehe.. still searching for that significant other π€£π€£π€£
Thank you so much!! ππππ
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Your blog is really nice. I just come across it and I absolutely loved it.β
Would be really glad if you could check out my blog as well and we could perhaps become blogger pals.β
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Hey thank you so much. I would definitely check it out π
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